One day my family was having a party at a farm so when I got there, I saw a flower farm but I did not look there. We went to the animal part there was around about 7 chickens,2 ducks,2 ponys, 1 horse. We fed the animals then we had to wash our hands,then we ate some of the food. We went to the markets there to buy some things,after we brought some stuff then we went to see the flowers but there was a human like statue but it was a greeny siver metal. There was two side by side we though that they were both fake.
Hi Lydia – great job!
Your piece is full of description. I can fully picture the scene which is exactly what the reader needs and wants. Keep using that detail to bring the scene to life in the readers mind as this allows the reader to become fully engrossed in the story!
Awesome job – keep on writing!
Ed Miller
Team100
Guernsey, Channel Islands.